Writing a story
23rd January 2011 19:44 #1
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Okay im writing a story

It's about a girl, ninja, who's name is Suzuki Miyuki and she gets kicked out her home so after her first day at work she gets beaten up by a gang, but eventually defeats them but she could hardly walk and then looses conscience and when she wakes up she's finds out that she's been taken in by a kind woman who's the, 'Mr. Popular's' of the school, mom which means they have to live together and they try not to let anyone know about this (ninjas are awesome) and Suzuki CAN'T let anyone know her secret.

What do you guys think? Im kind stuck nowadays so I need some ideas please message them to me

I'll thank everyone ahead of time

THANK YOU :)
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24th January 2011 18:04 #2
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-what about a other ninja that wants to kill her becuase she dishonered her family.
-or the other ninja wants to kill Mr. Popular becuase the other ninja loves Suzuki

-What if Suzuki trains Mr. Popular to fight of bullies or ninjas (you decide)

if you want some more ideas just ask.

PS what is the story about
Romance or action
Last edited: 24th January 2011 18:04 by MrAcid

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24th January 2011 18:29 #3
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What about stuff happening? Idk, it sounds ok so far, I have no ideas for you though.
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24th January 2011 22:46 #4
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It's not bad

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25th January 2011 20:28 #5
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Wow, this sounds alot like Ane Doki. But with a Ninja-twist :DD

(If your unfamiliar with Ane Doki, check it out. It's really good.)

Maybe some sort of Ecchi relationship... I know a certain *Finbar* would enjoy that...
Last edited: 25th January 2011 20:29 by KatekyoHitmanReborn

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26th January 2011 06:41 #6
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@MrAcid: both cause I love action and romance and I just finished reading Moon Boy

@NanoCarp:ahah

@Uni2123: yeah but I have writers block nowadays and a killer headache

@KatekyoHitmanReborn: *chuckle* i'll try

Thank you
Last edited: 26th January 2011 06:42 by Death_Case

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26th January 2011 08:29 #7
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Sounds a little bare right now. lil more detail about it could help with giving out ideas...... I feel you on the writers block for sure! (I love writing stories myself but get board and delete them usually)... Sounds like an interesting concept though.
Curious why do they have to keep it a secret that they live together? Will it effect mr. populars status? . . Heres idea just me talkin though -maybe mr. popular is enemy ninja and they kinda get a thing with one another.lol lil Romeo juliet in a way-
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26th January 2011 15:11 #8
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You know I like you we think so much alike I wanted to do romeo and juliet but I wasn't sure and same with the stories if I start getting bored then I delete them ahah
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26th January 2011 15:56 #9
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I agree with sirfrolov there, I need more details of the story really. Do have like, an opening chapter or anything written that we can look at?
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26th January 2011 21:10 #10
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yeah Death_Case, you should just post a little more info about it. Would love to help you out.
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26th January 2011 21:10 #11
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yeah Death_Case, you should just post a little more info about it. Would love to help you out.
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26th January 2011 21:15 #12
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the of laziness takes over but i dont know what to put in the beginning, like i want something to happen for the girl to be kicked out but i cant think and the only thing my friends are saying is "Think Denise Think!"... yes in reality my life is full of pressure, but i dont care so will you guys help me with the beginning?
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27th January 2011 13:30 #13
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i thought of different openings

-how about that the girl accidently killed a leader of the ninjas, without being in a dual. so she is banished from her clan.

-or she hates to fight, and refused to fight in a duel and is banished because of that.

-or she fell in love with an other ninja from another clan

tell me what you thought?
i dont know anymore at the moment. maybe later

hope it helped
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28th January 2011 04:05 #14
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Oh my buddas thank you! You gave me an idea romeo and juliet ninja ver. :)
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Originally posted by Death_Case
Oh my buddas thank you! You gave me an idea romeo and juliet ninja ver. :)


can someone explains why this scares me? Ninjas + Romeo and Juliet = Bad idea, besides, R&J is a tragedy, do you really want all your peeps to die in the end?

But it's your story so do whatever you want to.
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